Essay #2

Nolan B.

9/22/10

Mr. Salsich

English 9

Humans Are Filled With Secrets:

An Essay on the Book Tale of Two Cities

1) Secrets are huge among humans. 2) People need secrets to themselves because they don't want people to know everything about them. 3) Secrets are important for things only you want to know about, so keep them to yourself. 4) There is no person in the entire world without a secret.

TS: Charles Dickens has many idea's that are difficult to understand like his idea of how everyone has secrets, and no one can know someone else completely. SD: When he said,"that every beating heart in the hundreds of thousands of breasts there, is, in some its imaginings, a secret to the heart nearest it!", I got the idea of Dickens thinking everyone has some type of secret kept to themselves. CM: I think Dickens thinks that even if two people are very close, and it seems like they know every little detail about each other, they really don't at all. CM: He refers to this immensely throughout the paragraph so I really can't of any other ways he could mean by this. SD: He also talks about how his neighbor, friend, and his love of his life are all dead. CM: I think he means they are all dead to him by this because he will never truly know the entire person each of them are. CM: Dickens seems to really believe that he could never know the true someone, a certain belief he probably picked up after listening to all the lies and secrets when he worked in the courtroom (Appositive). CS: Dickens does has some odd ways of saying things, but when you really think and interpret what he's actually saying, he makes a lot of sense.

TS: A human having unknown secrets is like a frozen lake. SD: The ice on top of the lake is hard to break through, making it tough to reach the water under it. CM: The ice is like someone's trust, you have to earn their trust before they'll let you in. CM: If you break through the ice or earn their trust, they will share they deepest secrets with you. SD: The fish under a frozen lake are hidden, just like someone hiding a secret. CM: As a fisherman, you could try to catch those cloaked fish, learning all their concealed secrets if you do. CM: This isn't an easy feat though, you must wait in the freezing cold and be careful the ice doesn't break or you won't get to those secrets. SD: I have secrets too that I withheld inside me just like the frozen lake withholds its. CM: I won't tell any though because I need to trust you completely before I let them go. CM: I am like a frozen lake, you must break through my ice before you get to the shrouded things inside. CS: A frozen lake like a person with secrets, unexpected but a perfect comparison.

1) There are secrets hidden in everyone. 2) People have secrets so other people don't know as much about them as they do. 3) Some people think they know everything about each other, but there is no way that's possible. 4) Life without secrets is no life at all.

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Self-Assessment

1) I'm still working on my punctuation mistakes. I have trouble finding them and use comma's in the wrong places sometimes.

2) I really like my simile for my second paragraph. I thought it was different and the paragraph turned out great in my eyes too.

3) My first paragraph seems pretty weak compared to my second one. I don't think it came out as great as I wanted.

4) I would give myself a C+ on this essay.