Essay #16

Nolan B.

Mr. Salsich

English 9

3/30/11

Un-right Treatment:

An Essay on Rebellion

Rebellion is not uncommon for the people on this Earth. Disagreeing on what other people do and think is just in our nature. Each and every one of us has our own beliefs, and we like to stick to them. If a leader is doing unlawful actions, we as citizens have the right to rebel and disagree (Bell words).

Rebellion has never by me been done (Inversion), but I have heard about people who rebelled, and they do it only when it is needed. The number one reason to rebel (Echo Word) for me is if your leader is doing unjust things. Killing your own people, for one, is highly unjust (Verbal Opener). There is absolutely no reason for this to occur by a countries own leader so he can get his objectives done like that of Libya’s leader. A leader who makes decisions entirely by himself also deserves to be opposed (Echo word) by his people. Every person in a country should have their right to have a say on what the president does. I know sometimes, our president has to do what is needed to be done, but any decisions that involve our lives should be known by us and have our opinions considered. The last likely (alliteration) reason for a leader to be confronted (Echo word) by his people is when he's not doing his job. Slowly slouching silently (alliteration) in your chair of authority while completing nothing to help out your country is not what a leader should do. Any leader found doing this is no leader at all and should be removed. People don't like to rebel (Echo word), so they try to pick the best person to lead in the first place, but it doesn't alway turn out like that, causing a rebellion to find a better leader.

Me like many people, hate to see people fight and rebel even if it's needed. Though it is understandable that some leader's are a bad seed that needs to be replaced. If it were me, I would definitely want to have as best a leader I can, so I would rebel if it was necessary. I don't agree with everything the leaders of this country have done, but they have done nothing in my lifetime that would cause me to rebel.

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Self - Assessment

1.) For some reason, I still need to learn where to put my comma's. I struggle at some points in my writing when I have to decide whether or not to put a comma in a certain place. This troubles me, and I need to fix this soon

2.) I tried to put more of my own style into this essay, which I think could turn out for the best for me. I tried to use some more inversion by switching words around and such.

3.) My special effects were tough to fit in for me. I'm not sure all of them actually helped improve writing them, but some of them I know for sure did help with my writing.

4.) I would give myself a B on this essay.